In circles…


Eyes cannot absorb the depth.

Mouth sealed by a thousand oceans.

Blunt is memory.

Vague is desire.

In vain is fortune.

Blue possession.

Formless is form.

 

City blocks the vision.

We move meekly,

aquatic,

with pulsating young heart.

While we want to walk in mountains,

we walk about

in cleverly designed concrete labyrinths.

~ by Aquatic Poetry on August 30, 2012.

4 Responses to “In circles…”

  1. The poems builds well to those final lines…the punctuation marks on the poem…enjoyed muchl

  2. Thank you for the feedback, I always appreciate it.

  3. Ah, you’ve done something different than usual here. It’s interesting how the two parts gel together. It’s like you start with a portrait and then zoom out to reveal the landscape. Loved it!

    Cheers.
    Supertramp

  4. Lovely that you can detect a difference. Even I was oblivious to that fact. I do not think much about structure in my writings. The structure is mostly spontaneous. Thank you for sharing your thoughts, I appreciate appreciate it dearly.

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